Submitting to you
Makes breathing impossible:
You do take my breath away
Dominating you
Assuming vital control:
How we both enjoy breathplay
Last month we looked at the mondo form of
the katuata. As I’m sure everyone remembers, the Katuata is interpreted by
western poets as a three-line form with a syllabic structure of 5-7-7.
The sedoka form of the katuata comes in two
stanzas with each performing a separate function. The first stanza presents a scene. The second
stanza shows that scene from another perspective. If we look at the poem above
we’re considering the same relationship in stanza one from the perspective of a
submissive and, in stanza two, the same relationship is shown from the perspective
of the dominant partner.
As a tool for reminding us about the
importance of perspective, the sedoka is well worth considering. It’s also a
fun way looking at one subject from a pair of diverse perspectives.
Tasting your sweetness
Savouring your musky scent
Drinking your satisfaction
Feeling your wet tongue
As it explores my bare flesh
And transports me to new heights
As always, I look forward to seeing your
poems in the comments box below.
Have you been naughty?
Do you need a good spanking?
Which paddle should I select?
I have been naughty.
I deserve your punishment.
Please use the studded paddle.
We’re all familiar with the haiku: the poetic
form, imported from Japanese culture, and interpreted by western poets as a three-line
stanza with a syllable count of 5-7-5.
Less familiar, but similar in many ways to
the haiku, is the katuata. In its Japanese
form the poem was made up of 19 onji, which we’ve translated as syllables. Most
authorities give the Katuata a three-line form structure of 5-7-7.
One of the popular applications of this form
is the mondo: a poem traditionally written by two poets and presented in the
form of a question and answer. The first stanza is the question, the second is the response.
As a tool for helping with collaboration, this
is clearly an apposite way to begin a writing partnership. However,
as a fun way of getting two characters talking, or simply challenging the
artistic imagination, writing the brief exchange of a mondo at the start of a
writing session is an effective way to kick-start creativity.
Your plans for tonight? House of Cards
or Breaking Bad?
Or Pretty Little Liars?
Let’s be more daring.
Forget this Netflix and chill
We’ll make our own blockbuster
As always, I look forward to seeing your
poems in the comments box below.
From Adam & Eve - Based on the Book by New York Times Bestselling Authors Selena Kitt
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